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Many people believe that living a city offer greater benifits as compare to the countryside ? To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #city #offer #benifits #countryside
Many people believe that living
a
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in a
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city
 offer greater
benifits
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benefits
 as
compare
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compared
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 to the countryside . I partially agree with
this
 statement, because there are more advantages and disadvantages to
live
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living
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 in both
city
 and
countryside
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the countryside
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 . In some years ago , there is no more development in the metropolis. At that time they
also
seen
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saw
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same
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the same
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 as landscapes. I
willl
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will
 discuss
in
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this in
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 brief in
further
 paragraphs.
Firstly
, there are so many
benifits
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benefits
 to
live
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living
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 in
country
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a country
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 like good education
facilities
,good medical
facilities
 and many more other
facilities
.
Actually
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,Actually
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 most of the People stay in a town,when a person
live
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lives
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 in a
city
 they take good education to study in
aquality
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a quality
quality
 school
for example
 suddenly his/her was not good they can easily
going
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go
be going
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 to a fine hospital within very
less
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little
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 time.
Secondly
, most of the
individual
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individuals
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in
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are in
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surroundings
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their surroundings
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. They can enjoy the greenery of
environment
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the environment
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 make more sense of brotherhood. It is
a
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the
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 birthplace of most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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individuals. There is no more pollution as compared to
city
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the city
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. Some of the
facilities
 are available in
hometown
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my hometown
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. There are more disadvantages of living in a municipality like
the
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a
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city
 are overpopulated and the crime rate
is increases
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increases
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 in a
city
. The cost of living is
also
 very high . the accidents rate rates
also
 very much .
Therefore
, there are more positive and negative effects to
live
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living
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 in metro police and hometown . both are good at their own place. So all the things have a curve positive and negative effects both .
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