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Children should never be educated by parents at home

#children #parents #home
Some
people
 think that it is not good for
children
 if
parents
 are involved in their education. Mothers and fathers do not have enough skills to be teachers and are not qualified enough to teach students. The teacher is more helpful for students and supports them through the learning process because he has the necessary teaching skills and qualifications and school subjects are different, and it is essential to be taught by professionals.
Parents
 play a major role in
children
's lives.
Parents
 give their kids wisdom and information that will help them in the future.
For example
, a child who is educated by
parents
 will always have good discipline and behave politely with
people
.
Therefore
, they should be aware of the bad habits that they mustn`t show
such
 as quarrels, fights, robberies.
Parents
 are a mandatory part of
children
's lives, even if it means educating their
children
. In conclusion,
although
 some
people
 think that
children
 should not be educated by their
parents
, I strongly believe that they are the ones who develop good
behavior
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 their kids.
In addition
, young
people
 should be educated at school to develop in a social environment with youngsters and
thus
 to practice social competence.
Parents
 are responsible for upbringing their
children
 and becoming responsible adults, but teachers are the ones who give them knowledge.
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