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Gloabl warming is reported on a dailay basis. Give your opinion on the situation.

Global warming and increasing ocean
levels
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 have been
two
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 major concerns for many
people
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 in recent years, as
people
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 are now suffering greatly from natural
disasters
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 as floods, species extinction, and so on.
This
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 essay will attempt to look at the issue's underlying problem and
then
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 propose some viable solutions. The Earth is warming hotter and sea
levels
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 are rising faster than average for
two
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 reasons.
Cause
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 is that businesses and automobiles exhaust far too much gas into the atmosphere.
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make
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green house
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greenhouse
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 effect more serious .
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, in 2019,
two
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 of the
most
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apply
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deadliest forest fires occurred in the Amazon and Australia, when the global temperature increased considerably.
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,
natural
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the natural
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 habitat was severely harmed, and thousands of animals ended up
death
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.
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, the ice at the North Pole and
South
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the South
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 Pole melts as the temperature rises. Sea
levels
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 rise
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 of water from ice melting. When sea
levels
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raise
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rise
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 above the safe level , it
cause
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causes
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 considerable negative
disasters
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,
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 as volcanic eruptions and tsunamis, resulting in many tragic deaths. There are
two
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 of
most
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the most
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 dangerous natural
disasters
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 for mankind. Especially, those who live near the coast. According to government statistics, human and property losses are predicted to rise at
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 startling rate
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 of these
disasters
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. Significantly, when their ecosystem experiences dramatic changes, marine species are
also
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 adversely affected. One of the most effective measures to tackle
this
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 problem is the collective actions from the government, big companies and individuals. To reduce the high rate of greenhouse gas emissions, on a large scale,
government
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the government
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 with its mighty power should enforce adequate conservation regulations and boost citizen awareness, encouraging
people
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 to ride bicycles
instead
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 of motorbikes and cars to
protects
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the environments
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environments
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environment
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.
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,
people
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 should be self-discipline and conscious to save our habitat. In conclusion , it is clear that there are various reasons for global warming and ocean
levels
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 rising , and measures should be taken to tackle these problems .

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