Some people think individuals are more and more dependent on each other. Others believe we are more and more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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The relationships between individuals are becoming more and more complicated. Some
people
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think we are more and more dependent on each other, while some
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think the distance between
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is growing larger. Both
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point, and these ideas are not exclusive. Because of
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globalization and technicalization,
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is happening
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. Because of the quick rhythm, everyone is busy
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solving their own problems. Dating studying and working, all those things
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daily life of
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. When
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get failure or
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, they really need somebody to help them to get away from
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. That’s why
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are more and more dependent on honesty
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. Because the
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in
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and reliable
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can heal each other. At the same
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,
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will spend less
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seeking and developing a new
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, because it’s
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and exhausted to
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on from a serious
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. To protect themselves,
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to be individual and independent. As soon as
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find the signal that they might get hurt, they can cut the loss immediately. That’s one of the reasons more and more
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feel that
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are getting hard to open their
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with growing old.
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, the characteristic of modern ages made
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less
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on seeking
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, at the same
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and permanent
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is getting more and more invaluable. Individuals are more and more dependent on each other while they are getting independent.
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