Some people think individuals are more and more dependent on each other. Others believe we are more and more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

The relationships between individuals are becoming more and more complicated. Some
people
think we are more and more dependent on each other, while some
people
think the distance between
people
is growing larger. Both
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point, and these ideas are not exclusive. Because of
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globalization and technicalization,
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is happening
everyday
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. Because of the quick rhythm, everyone is busy
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solving their own problems. Dating studying and working, all those things
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daily life of
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. When
people
get failure or
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disappointing
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, they really need somebody to help them to get away from
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. That’s why
people
are more and more dependent on honesty
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. Because the
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in
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and reliable
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can heal each other. At the same
time
,
people
will spend less
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seeking and developing a new
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, because it’s
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and exhausted to
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on from a serious
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. To protect themselves,
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trend
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to be individual and independent. As soon as
people
find the signal that they might get hurt, they can cut the loss immediately. That’s one of the reasons more and more
people
feel that
people
are getting hard to open their
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with growing old.
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less
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and permanent
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is getting more and more invaluable. Individuals are more and more dependent on each other while they are getting independent.
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  • interconnected
  • globalization
  • remote work
  • independence
  • dependency
  • specialization
  • professional services
  • social validation
  • individualism
  • self-reliance
  • collective action
  • sustainability
  • global community
  • navigating
  • complexity
  • environmental movement
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