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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion You should write at least 250 words.

#minutes #people #technology
Nowadays, shopping becomes very easy due to advanced technology so that,
bunch
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 of
people
 support that ideology whereas,
other
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others
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 oppose it. I personally love
this
 way of shopping because it makes life so easy and removes lots of
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.
Firstly
, the main reason is
people
 can buy
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anything
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any thing
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anything
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 online from various sites which give them not only variety but
also
 discounts.
Moreover
, it saves their time like, in pasts,
people
 find things from going shop to shop but, now everything is under in your just one click.
For instance
,
last
 month, my friend had
birthday
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, but I had no time to buy a
gift
 for him. So, I chose a
gift
 for him from
a
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 online shopping site, they wrapped it properly and delivered it on time after got that
gift
 my friend called me and said thank you I felt so happy and
reliefed
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relieved
 because he was satisfied by my
gift
.
However
, sometimes,
people
 face scams problems due to online shopping because there are too many sites which
is
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 hacked or created by hackers
therefore
,
people
 lose their money . So that, they try to avoid
to shop
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 online.
In addition
, sometimes, customers get damaged products after that, they face lots of trouble to replace and repair them. In conclusion,
although
 sometimes,
people
 face trouble during online shopping, it is
best
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 way to buy
a
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the
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 latest product because it is a Demand
of
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the
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life because
of
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life is now very busy and hectic.
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