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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 day and age, the percentage of young
people
 to some extent has increased in comparison with older ones in some nations.
Although
 having a young population has many benefits for society, the drawbacks are of importance to be scrutinised. On the plus side, it may appear that being
high
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 number of young
people
 proves more beneficial for each society. The
first
 compelling reason is considered with economic prosperity. To be more precise, young
people
 have not only
fresher
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mind
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 but
also
stronger
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body
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 compared to elderlies in regard to accomplishing their duties and responsibilities.
Moreover
, we are living in
computer
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 age and it is impossible to ignore cutting-edge technology. The younger generation
are
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 more techno-savvy and they have
better
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 function when it comes to computer-related issues. An obvious example of
this
 is a group of young who set up a newfound
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 which make use of up-to-the-minute technology. while
,
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 elderlies can not compete with them due to
lack
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 of technical skills. Having said that,
however
, the drawbacks of
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 the percentage of
younger
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 generation
in contrast
 to older ones should not be underestimated.
To begin
 with, the more young
people
 are, the more job opportunities are required. Simply put, elderlies generally are retirement and they are not expected to have
career
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, while younger ones are at
age
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 that should
be work
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 in order to either get a green pasture or meet their needs.
Therefore
, they have to work so as to make enough money. On balance,
the
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increasing the number of young
people
 would be both rewarding and problematic for society. While
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 it may
seems
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 that paves the way for improving
economic
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 climate,
young
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the young
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 generation
highly
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is highly
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 likely to suffer from hindrances and obstacles for finding
appropriate
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an appropriate
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 job.
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