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Even Though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people’s health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?

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Doctors from all over the place have the same idea about the disadvantages of fast
food
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 which may affect
people
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’s health in the long term, but
people
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 still have a large amount of fast
food
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.
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 of all, the reasons why
people
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 consume fast
food
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 are that the cost for foods is inexpensive, convenient in the morning rush, and open for 24 hours. In detail, fast
food
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restaurants
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such
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 as McDonald's, KFC, and Burger King provide very cheap prices for
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 and drinks starting from a dollar. In fact, customers can buy one chicken burger, fries, ice cream, or frozen drinks which cost them only one dollar each.
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,
people
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 often eat fast
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 in the morning because they can finish the meal on time before arriving at the workplace or school. Due to the fact that almost every fast
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 restaurant is open all night and day;
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, when
people
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 are hungry at night or in the early morning the fast-
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 becomes their
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 choice.
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, to solve
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 problem the government should be involved in these cases to find the best solution. The
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 thing they can do is educate their population to be aware of the risks after having a lot of fast
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. High blood pressure, obesity, high cholesterol are examples of the health problems that come along with eating fast
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 too frequently.
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,
restaurants
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 may create new menus which use healthier ingredients so that
people
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 have more options. In conclusion, with inexpensive prices, individuals can easily finish the meal, and
restaurants
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 open for 24 hours every day is the positive side of fast
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 that becomes the main reason for
people
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's decision to have meals at fast-
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restaurants
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.
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, there are more disadvantages than advantages, the health issues which may come along with fast
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 are not worth it.
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