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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
Nowadays, online shopping become one of the fastest-growing industries in the world in lieu of
this
 physical shops in towns and cities is intended to close. I strongly agree with the statement, that online shop owners give more financial freedom every month while the drawback will identify the owner to declare bankruptcy. On the one hand, online shopping is the best move for
people
 who want to go for business. Being the owner of
this
 business will give reduced the expenses in the sense that they do not need to pay for the rental, less electricity bill, and tax. Because of advanced technology, many software applications have been created that can be used to shop like lazada,
shopee
Correct your spelling
shoppe
, and
zalora
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ZALORA
Zamora
, that cater to whatever you need in just browsing and clicking.
For example
,
people
 with long working hours
instead
 of going to the mall they just go online and use their time to go
store
 in another task.
As a result
, all their customers are
people
 who want stress-free shopping and not crowded
people
.
On the other hand
, the owner who owns a physical
store
 is having a hard time coping. With the booming of online shopping,
store
 owners thinking to close their shops so they can cut rent bills and other expenses. Many
store
 owners starting to think of different promotions or sales to survive.
For instance
, a bigger
store
 starting to cut half their space renting the half to others which can surpass for a few months but still they intend to close,
Hence
, it
also
 gives them more difficult because of the pandemic,
people
 are afraid to go out. In conclusion, online shopping is one of the go-to shopping of the
people
 that make their life easy which lead the shops on different places to shut down.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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