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One of the major problems that faces today’s governments is creating enough satisfactory housing for their increasing populations whilst still trying to protect the environment. Discuss this statement and give your opinion.

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New colonies are developing at a fast pace in
this
 era of urbanization.
This
 creates the biggest problem on the globe because the
government
 is approving new housing schemes for a rapidly incremental population. Whereas, there are so many efforts for environmental protection is going on. I have shared my points of view and opinion in the
further
 paragraphs. To commence with, building new homes are significant for ongoing population demand as
this
 is the responsibility of the
government
 to provide shelter to every citizen. But as cities are getting expanded, authorities need to cut jungles and
trees
 to accommodate citizens in them.
For example
. in 1983 Brampton
city
 was not even existed, only big fams and jungles existed. After 5 years in 1988, the
first
government
 building was built, as Toronto is getting expanded, people started moving to Brampton, so the
government
 had to remove all farmlands,
trees
 and needed to build houses on it which is really devastating for the
environment
. On the other side, saving our greeneries is
also
 a vital role of authorities, so they make gardens in cities and
also
 implement eco-friendly
city
 policies.
For example
, in Brampton, house-owners can not cut any
trees
 which are available in the backyard and on sidewalks without obtaining permission from the
city
 service.
Such
 policies make living suitable for humans and the
environment
.
City
 services
also
 should encourage people to plant as many
trees
 and plants in backyards and should provide financial support to buying crops and fertilizers that undoubtedly leave positive impacts on the
environment
. I opine, on one side governments are expanding cities and providing roofs to people as
this
 is a part of their duties, but they
also
 have power, resources and technologies to make newly built societies livable by taking care of surroundings and
environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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