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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family-run business?

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It is thought by some that it is beneficial to have a
family owned
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business
. There are advantages of
family
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the family
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business
 but there are
also
 drawbacks to be taken into account. On the one hand, there are a number of benefits of a
business
which
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that
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is ran
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is run
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 within the family.
Firstly
, in a family
business
, people
work
 for themselves so, they will
work
 harder and be more dedicated to
take
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taking
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 their company to a new height and
make
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making
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 it lucrative.
Secondly
, the
business
 can be passed down through the generations. The new generations could learn numerous things at a very young age about
business
 from their family
members
.
As a result
, they will be able to handle the
business
 as they grow up without having to employ other unknown people.
Thirdly
, they have a flexible
work
 schedule; they do not have to
work
 from 9-5.
This
 factor contributes towards increasing their efficiency and helps
tgem
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them
 to remain focused
in
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 their
work
.
On the other hand
, one drawback of
family
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a family
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business
 is that due to nepotism, family
members
 might be promoted to higher positions
instead
 of
skillful
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 non-related staff, and they might not have
required
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the required
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 skills to be successful managers and directors.
Thus
, it will hamper the
business
 resulting in mediocre
business
 performance. Another downside is that
business
 disputes can lead to family conflicts because issues become subjective rather than objective.
Consequently
, the bond between family
members
 might be destroyed forever. In conclusion, there are benefits of having a family
business
, as the family
members
 give their best because they are working for themselves, and they have a flexible
work
 schedule.
However
, there are some drawbacks,
such
 as nepotism, and family
bond
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bonds
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 might be damaged because of
business
 disputes.
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