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Children should never be educated by their parents at home

#children #parents #home
Nowadays, many
children
 around the world have to be educated online with the help of their
parents
. In my opinion, it is difficult for
children
 and their
parents
, mainly because not all the
parents
 have the qualifications to teach.
This
 is one of the problems in distance learning. There are a number of advantages of homeschooling.
Firstly
, being at home
parents
 and
children
 spend more time together and do things together.
Parents
 and relatives educate their
children
 on how to behave well and give them knowledge for life. Another advantage for the
children
 is that they will be distracted less at home than in class. When kids are distracted they miss the most important things connected with the school subject.
As a result
, it is difficult to understand the new lessons and continue with homework and tasks……………… .
On the other hand
, there are negatives of education by
parents
 at home. A major drawback is that
parents
 have to go to work and do not have time to teach lessons and deal with exercises. What is more, teenagers should be able to do schoolwork without the help of adults. Teenagers go to school to study lessons, gain knowledge and to communicate with their classmates and spend time with peers.
This
 way young people become more sociable and ………………………………………………………………………………………………. In conclusion, homeschooling is an alternative way of education in hard times of crisis and
pandemic
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