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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#crime #rate #advances #technology
Over the
last
 two or three decades, the
crime
 amount has been diminishing tremendously than ever before because of
the
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modern cutting-edge
technology
. Is possible to reduce the
crime
rate
in
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nowadays due to the
advanced
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 in
technology
? Yes, it is possible.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons.
To begin
 with,
advancement
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 of
technology
 gives
massive
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 amount of
secure
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 and
safety
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 from the culprits so the
crime
rate
 has been being decreased
than
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in
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past
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the past
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days
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. Nowadays, everywhere and
everyplace
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every place
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 has security cameras
to
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around the world,
hence
, the culprits would not like to do any illegal activities, they afraid about the CCTV footage as
a evidence
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evidence
a piece of evidence
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.
For instance
, a majority of Indian shops has CCTV cameras for safety-purpose,
thus
, the
crime
rate
 decreases after the invention of
technology
.
Furthermore
,
present
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 generation has a variety of modern
technology
 in order to the cops can
efforlessly
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effortlessly
findout
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find out
theifs
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thieves
 and culprits
with in
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within
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 short period than
past
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the past
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,
as a result
, the
crime
rate
 declines.
For example
, in Scotland cops has the modern technologies for finding
crime
 extremely effortlessly,
hence
, sometimes other nations go to
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 training in Scotland.
In addition
, forensic
technology
 is the best for
findout
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find out
 the
crime
 within
short
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 period. To conclude,
technology
 is flourishing by leaps and bounds in all fields in order to the
crime
rate
 diminish tremendously than ever before.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
 statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope
this
 process is conducive to building a
health
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 and
safety
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 society.
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