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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
last
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 two or three decades, the
crime
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 amount has been diminishing tremendously than ever before because of
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modern cutting-edge
technology
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. Is possible to reduce the
crime
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rate
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nowadays due to the
advanced
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advances
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 in
technology
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? Yes, it is possible.
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, I strongly agree with
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 statement for the following reasons.
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advancement
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 of
technology
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 gives
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 amount of
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 and
safety
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 from the culprits so the
crime
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rate
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 has been being decreased
than
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in
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past
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the past
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days
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. Nowadays, everywhere and
everyplace
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every place
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 has security cameras
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around the world,
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, the culprits would not like to do any illegal activities, they afraid about the CCTV footage as
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evidence
a piece of evidence
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.
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, a majority of Indian shops has CCTV cameras for safety-purpose,
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, the
crime
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rate
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 decreases after the invention of
technology
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.
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,
present
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the present
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 generation has a variety of modern
technology
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 in order to the cops can
efforlessly
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effortlessly
findout
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find out
theifs
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thieves
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 short period than
past
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the past
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,
as a result
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, the
crime
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rate
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 declines.
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, in Scotland cops has the modern technologies for finding
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 extremely effortlessly,
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, sometimes other nations go to
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 training in Scotland.
In addition
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, forensic
technology
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 is the best for
findout
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find out
 the
crime
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 within
short
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 period. To conclude,
technology
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 is flourishing by leaps and bounds in all fields in order to the
crime
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rate
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 diminish tremendously than ever before.
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, I strongly agree with
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 statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope
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 process is conducive to building a
health
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 and
safety
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 society.
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