The nuclear family is well adapted to moving due to its size. Do you think children benefit in any way from moving? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays it has become very common for nuclear families to
move
from one place to another in
this
modern society. Reasons behind vary from family to family. In
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I will be discussing why I believe that
this
shift has more pros than cons.
To begin
with, there is no debate that every parent wants the best for their
children
.begin able to have access to
high quality
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education , a safe environment to grow up in.
Therefore
, many families are taking the initiative to relocate from one place to another. A recent study that was conducted in Canada has shown that the cardinal reason for most nuclear decisions to
move
is safety.
For
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many refugees
that
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frome
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from
countries
such
Iraq
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or Syria
move
because they do not want their
offsprings
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to be troubled by constant war and the unsafe environment
around
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.
Moreover
, they will have access to better education and health care.
On the other hand
, one of the major drawbacks
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this
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is
children
will not be able to maintain relationships with their childhood friends that they grow up with.
As a
result
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children
may become isolated.
Furthermore
, moving to a new place that has different culture, traditions and even speaking a different language is difficult for
children
to cope with, and they may have
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shock at
first
.
However
, I think these issues are insignificant when compared to having a safe country to live in . To sum up, various factors encourage individuals to
move
from their home country , mainly these factors revolve around their
children
and
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well beginning .
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