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Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion

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Nowadays, with the rise in the number of opportunities to experience international
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 about
business
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 and culture, some
people
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 think that
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trend
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 is positive for
society
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.
On the other hand
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, others believe that nations should treasure their own
identity
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.
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 essay, as my opinion leads to, will try to elaborate on both points of view and my own idea with some considerations. To commence with, I personally believe that governments all over the globe should expose
people
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 to international
things
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 frequently through
business
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 and cultural contact. It is mainly because
people
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 can have a lot of opportunities to broaden their horizons by the cultural diversity.
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, international universities have a large number of students with different cultural backgrounds, which means that students can learn about different perspectives of
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 and be global leaders in the future. As a matter of fact, many universities in Japan are not internationalized and almost all of the Japanese students cannot be good at speaking English even though
people
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 live in
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 a globalized world where English is the commonly used language. 
This
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trend
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 has adverse effects on Japanese
society
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 in terms of international
business
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 and it is difficult for Japan to be a global leader.
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, there is no doubt that international connection has positive influences on not only individuals but
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society
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. Despite the aforementioned advantages,
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trend
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also
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 generates a chance of disappearing the country's
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, unfortunately. The main reason is that international new
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 are intriguing and fashionable, leading to the disappearance of the national
identity
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.
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, the majority of
people
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 as the average consumers, consider fascinating
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 more valuable in comparison to the traditional.
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,
people
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 today are able to buy cheap clothes since many clothing companies like ZARA and UNIQLO expand their markets internationally. In fact,
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 the Japanese used to wear traditional clothes, which are called YUKATA,
people
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 today have a tendency to buy clothes at the previous shops mentioned as if they forgot the existence of traditional clothing.
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 why it is true that international connections get a risk of disappearing conventional
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 like the national
identity
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. To sum up, it is true that increasing contact about
business
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 and culture has both positive and negative effects on
society
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;
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, I strongly believe that the governments all over the world should be willing to have relationships with other countries because advantages may outnumber the disadvantages of
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trend
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