The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen

and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram shows the data about Yemen and Italian
people
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with their ages in 2000 and
projection
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projections
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for 2050. We can see that the percentage of
of
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60+
years
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old population in Yemen is
on
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at
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the
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dramatically higher level compared to schoolchildren in 2000.
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adult
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between 15 and 59
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have
nearer
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percentage
to
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the old. We can see that the majority of
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in Yemen are between 0-14
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.
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in 2050 projection it will be replaced by 15-59
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old
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(57.3%). The old population will increase slightly from 3.6% to 5.7% but
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it is
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the lowest percentage among other ages. It is clear from the
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that teenager groups go down rapidly from 50.1% to 37% between 2000 and 2050. In Italy 15-59
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old
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maintain
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highest level in
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both
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.
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the number of
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with 60+
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will go up
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a considerable amount from 24.1% in 2000 to 42.3% in 2050.
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-14
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group will dip down gradually by 3%. In conclusion,60+
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old
people
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have an upward trend in both countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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