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Annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone in the US

The chart displays the information about
expenditures
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 on residential and
cell
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phones
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 by Americans for a period of nine years. In 2001 average person spent seven hundred per year on residential
phone
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services
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,but on
cell
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phone
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services
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 Americans spent two hundred .In 2001 the position of both
phone
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services
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 was completely different than in 2010.At the beginning of 2000th people preferred to use residential
phones
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.
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, in 2010 the situation changed a lot .American society started to use
cell
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phones
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 more than residential
phones
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. From 2001 to 2003
expenditures
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 on
cell
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phone
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services
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 showed a sustainable increase and by the end of 2003 totalled three hundred.
However
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 other service displays decreased from 7 hundred to 6 hundred in 2003.
Then
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 both
services
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 showed definitely different results . Average annual
expenditures
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 on
cell
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phones
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 grew rapidly but
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expenditures
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 on residential
phone
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services
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 fell rapidly .
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 spending on landlines fell 6 years only in 2006 spending on mobile
phones
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 that grew all these years equalled with
expenditures
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 on residential
phone
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services
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.From 2006 to 2010 situation with
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 did not change at all.
Cell
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phone
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services
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 showed an increase and residential
phone
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services
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 showed a decrease .In 2010 average Americans spent seven hundred on mobile
phone
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services
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 and four hundred on landlines
services
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.

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