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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Technology has become an indispensable part of every person
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 it is sometimes thought modern equipment has made our
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 very efficient, others believe that these
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 make
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difficulties
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 I will discuss both merits and demerits of modern devices. There are several reasons why labour-saving equipment is useful to decrease
stress
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. The
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 and foremost important thing is that time-saving. Nowadays both men and women are working and they do not have time for
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household
 chores. when they need to do some additional domestic works after their job they feel their
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 is very stressful.
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survey in the UK,
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 can feel relaxed and refreshed when they have modern
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 as dishwashers, robotic vacuums cleaners, washing machines and so on.
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, if they have these
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, they have extra time
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 they can spend a good quality time with their family.
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, labour-saving
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 are important to decline
stress
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. Another reason to consider that communication
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 make
life
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 very easy means
people
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 can work in any corner of the world, the internet and computer make it possible.
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, during pandemics, employees are encouraged to work from home and it is a convenient way to jobs.
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, there are many applications available to communicate to those
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 who live anywhere across the world
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 as Facebook, What's
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, Instagram etc.
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, modern devices provide immense benefits.
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, every garden has weeds, there are some drawbacks
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, due to long sitting for jobs at home, human's
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 is very sedentary.
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, without physical
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people
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 face many diseases like diabetes.
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, they think about how to keep them fit and healthy,
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 situation increases
stress
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 in their
life
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. In the conclusion, it is true that modern technology equipment is very helpful in daily
life
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 and reduce
stress
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, but the negative effects should not neglect.
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