Some people say that students who achieve the highest score in their exams should be rewarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Part of society argues that students achieving the greatest

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in their exams should be rewarded while many people believe those showing

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should be rewarded too. In

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essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion from my perspective. On the

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hand, many pupils are influenced to get the highest

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in order to get lots of praise both from teachers and parents.

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in school as the clever

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, it is commonly known in educational circumstances that their children are promised by their parents that they can get a number of gifts if they can achieve the greatest

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, take me as an example, when

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was in junior high school, I tend to

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hard to get the better

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that

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can achieve and wake up early to

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, which will boost my energy to learn if I get rewarded to buy some toys that I was looking for.

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, it is believed that not only the clever

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who should get praises and rewards, but

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striving hard to

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do not get the highest result. I believe that every student is created to have different talents in various

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. Talking about school in my home country, Indonesia, students in my country nowadays are highly focused on result-oriented rather than the

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itself and

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, they tend to focus on exact courses like Maths and Physics, where not all students have expertise in those fields.

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, pupils who already try their best to

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the courses and show

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good

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do not get the tremendous

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should be rewarded

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. To sum up, children who achieve the greatest result as well as those who show better

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of learning

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do not accomplish the highest

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should be rewarded. Having

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said, I believe that regardless of their

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, every student has their own talent and need to be dug to maximize their skills.