It is more important to spend public money promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?
The
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Health
health
promotion and care is a fundamental issue that every government should put into consideration during bugdeting
and it is a grey area that Correct your spelling
budgeting
need
to be handled with great care.Change the verb form
needs
The society
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Society
urgues
that ,it is imperative to utilize community resources advocating for a healthy way of living so Correct your spelling
argues
urges
that
to stop sickness rather than to use it on the management of people who are already sick.Indeed Correct word choice
as
in
my opinion,Add the comma(s)
,in
i
completely agree and Change the capitalization
I
this
essay will elaborate more.
Firstly
,health
advocasy
will save the state enough funds that would have been used in medical treatment.Correct your spelling
advocacy
This
is because it enhances the quality of life for all people such
that there is reduction
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the reduction
a reduction
of
premature deaths.Change preposition
in
Inaddition
,Correct your spelling
In addition
training
of community leaders is very significant to the society as they will support the government in following up on Correct article usage
the training
Correct your spelling
maintenance
maintainance
of Correct article usage
the maintainance
village
best Correct article usage
the village
health
status.For example
,80% of heart diseases and stroke can be prevented by eliminating common risk factor
.Fix the agreement mistake
factors
Therefore
,society
without illness will save the nation Add an article
a society
alot
of Correct your spelling
a lot
fund
.
Fix the agreement mistake
funds
Secondly
,on
contrast to well-being,good healthcare should be available and accessible to everyone who is not feeling well.Change preposition
in
However
,the parliament pay
the state healthcare to manage sick patients in the community.Medical treatment is very expensive Change the verb form
pays
such
that billions of money is allocate
for Change the verb form
is allocated
the
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apply
health
care especially those patients with commorbidity
who requires frequent services and daily medications.Correct your spelling
comorbidity
co-morbidity
For example
,in 2021 the star newspaper stated that health
sector Correct article usage
the health
take
over 40% of the Change the verb form
takes
uganda
financial budget yearly.Change the capitalization
Uganda
Therefore
,healthy
nation will come along with Correct article usage
a healthy
utilization
of funds which Add an article
the utilization
however
,can be saved Add the comma(s)
,however
Correct your spelling
through
though
healthy Correct your spelling
through
advocasy
.
To sum up,Correct your spelling
advocacy
government
is Add an article
the government
sore
responsible Change the adjective
sorely
of
a healthy nation.To illustrate more,promotion of proper diet,regular Change preposition
for
excercises
should be emulated and if not, the situation will increase Correct your spelling
exercises
exercise
burden
to the hospitals and taxpayers.Add an article
the burden
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