Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays a large group of
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community
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have an opinion that
goverments
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governments
government
should work hard and put a huge fund on investing
railroads
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rather than highways.To a certain
points
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, I would agree with
this
statement,because
railway
networks are more portable, safer, economical and environment_friendly. As far as safety and portability
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, the
railway
system
offer
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safer and portable commuting
system
for both citizens and goods.To cue evidence,
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trains can carry hundreds of people and tonnes of goods at
a
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same time, but
on the other hand
vehicles like buses, trucks and cars can carry only a few.
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we can see and hear in news stories the number of road accidents is higher than
railway
accidents. So,
railway
transpontation
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transportation
increase safety and it obviously could be beneficial for both people and
goverment
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government
governments
alike.
On the other hand
, from the environmental and economical point of view, railways produce less amount of greenhouse gases to compare with
road
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transport
system
and
as a result
of
this
issue the total cost of transport decrease.
For instance
,annual
greenhause
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greenhouse
gas emissions by highways
tranepont
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transport
in Iran is approximately 13, 2%,but on the other sector which is
railway
systems is about 6.7%.To draw
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and metro can help us to save our planet. In conclusion, safety and environmental issues are literally important factors for governments in transportation.So depend on rails and
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budget for it is much more rational.In my opinion, governments should focus on
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the quality
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of vehicles and transport
system
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rather than
quantity
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of them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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