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Cheaper food is now available because of greater use of fertilizers and improved machinery. This improved production, however, can be harmful to individuals and the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Discuss, including examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Nowadays as technology expanded in every field like
food
 , clothes and even machines for house chores. So that some people argue that
such
 machinery and
fertilizers
 make
food
 available at a minimal cost, while other groups suggest that despite having production in
food
 it gives detrimental
effects
 to humans and society as well. I agree with these notions. My arguments can be justified
further
 in the ensuing paragraphs. There are several reasons behind my agreement. The
first
 and foremost reason is that as in the past there were no diseases because most of the people didn't use
such
 type of
fertilizers
 and adding colours ,
as a result
, of that the laymen's in the past were very feet and healthy.
However
, in the present by adding additives in
food
 products give adverse
effects
 on the human body and suffer from severe diseases like
food
 poisoning.
For example
,there is a survey regarding that around 34% of masses in Singapore suffer from
food
 poisoning every year.
Furthermore
, to make the shelf-life of
food
last
 longer most of the bigger firms and the
food
 industry add a variety of
fertilizers
. To add to
this
, some famous brands like Nestle chings noodles etc.
Moreover
, so many of these brads
also
 make instant noodles by adding
fertilizers
 to make
food
last
 longer.
Although
, it takes less amount of time but gives adverse
effects
 on the human body like its
effects
 on metabolism, indigestion
as a result
 that it turned out in the worst disease like a blockage in the intestines. In conclusion, I agree with the notion that adding
fertilizers
 and additives to
food
 gives adverse
effects
 on humans and society. Despite having increment in
food
 production, it gives health problems and turned out in a serious disease.
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