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Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programs. Others think that it is better to produce these locally.

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Some
people
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 feel that importing movies and television programmes from other countries
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 good for a country's
culture
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, whereas others believe that producing these locally is much better. I will discuss both views and give my own opinion in the following essay. There are some reasons why
people
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 think it is beneficial for the
culture
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 of a country to buy foreign
films
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 and programmes.
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 is
such
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 a good way to facilitate the
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 among nations around the world. It is undeniable to say that we are now living in globalization, so if we have a basic understanding of cultural practices through these movies, it will be easier
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 us to integrate into other societies.
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, they believe that these overseas movies and programmes play an important role in diversifying their own
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. Thanks to
these
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 series, citizens will know more about
others tradition
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other traditions
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 of other nations which allows them to enrich their own
tradition
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traditions
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. One good illustration of
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 is that when we
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 Korean’s
films
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 or shows and as a
consequence
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,consequence
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 we will find out more about
cultural
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the cultural
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 traits of
this
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 nation and choose what
tradition
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 traits of that country is suitable to apply to our nation.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 are in favour of producing these domestically due to two leading reasons. One of them could be that it is more convenient for
producer
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a producer
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 to convey their desired
messeges
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messages
 to viewers. Guests or casts in these
films
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 are too familiar with
audience
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the audience
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;
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;
people
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 can easily understand what the meaning of
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programm
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programme
program
 is.
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, they will gain in-depth knowledge about their
culture
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 in an interesting way.
Besides
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, when these
films
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 are produced locally
producer
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producers
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 can give more and more various valuable traditions to viewers without having permission for
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the copyright
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. In conclusion, there are some benefits for both kinds of
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produce
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product
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,
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however
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,however
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 I am still in
opinion
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the opinion
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 of having these
films
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 and programs produced locally. -325 words-
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