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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many have an idea that fast
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 manufacturers have several drawbacks to stakeholders namely: the environment, eating habits, and families. I agree to a certain extent,
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, there are some issues to consider. Both will be examined.
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 with, it is undeniable that fast
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 industries are alternatives that provide people have their meals quickly in rush hours. The reason for
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 is their menu is pretty easy to grab and go at a reasonable price when compared to other
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. As a consequence, it still is the popular choice on the busiest day.
On the other hand
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, there are various detrimental sides associated with fast
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 manufacturers.
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 and foremost, the most important one is destroying people's health.
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 is because that fast
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 does not contain useful nutrients.
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, the ingredient of fried chicken is flour, chicken, seasoning powder.
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, many who consume it exceed the carbohydrate and sodium's daily recommendation will tend to have their health problems namely: obesity, kidney disease etc. Urging the environment to have more wastes is the final negative aspect for
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 topic.
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 is due to the fact that the ingredients of fast
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 use a long time to decompose themselves.
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, bread on the hamburger will take more than 6 months to decompose itself. In conclusion, I personally agree with the opinion that the fast-
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 industry has negative aspects not only to the person but
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 to the environment.
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, it will be better if the government in each country focuses on
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 and try to educate their population to know its drawbacks for preventing and saving our world.
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