In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

After finishing high school many young folks decide to take a
gap
year
before going for studies.
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it is obligatory to find a job or travel for
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year
. While, it has some significant merits,
such
as gaining
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experience, it may result
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taking courses at all. In
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by presenting relevant examples. One of the biggest
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not going to the university
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after graduating is the experience achieved from additional activities,
such
as volunteering. International exchanges have
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of benefits,
for example
, young citizens can broaden their minds and because of
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they would have had
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opportunity to get to know themselves. Volunteering has always inspired people and encouraged them to be a better version of themselves. If more young adults have had decided to do so, they would have not
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university
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totally without thinking or in rush.
However
, after taking a
gap
year
a significant part of society does not apply for studies, at all, because the imagination of
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studying
for the
next
5 years or more is uncannily unmotivating and they have gotten used to
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situation during
this
period of time.
For instance
, a person who has been
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for the
year
straight does not see himself
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settling
down again, the reason for not wanting the enormous fun of
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to stop.
Consequently
, a
gap
year
may discourage young developing
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community
from
further
education leaving them without
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degree.
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a result, it would have been difficult for them to find a satisfying job. To sum up, citizens should have
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to develop and find themselves during a
gap
year
because they would avoid making rush
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decisions
that they would have
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regretted
later. I am
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strongly
concerned that all the advantages,
such
as life experiences far more overshadow any disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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