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some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. but others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #teenagers #school #subjects #focus #interest
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It is argued by some people that all
subjects
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 are important for youngsters to study whereas , it is believed by other pessimists that only the single
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 should be focused by them in which they are more interested . It has
disagreed
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 that only
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subject
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 is sufficient to concentrate on . In the aforementioned ,paragraphs these points of view will be discussed before providing a liable conclusion. Undoubtedly ,
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 should go for that
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 in the future in which he or she is interested , but by studying that only
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one
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 can not get fully successful in life because the
subjects
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 which are provided to teenagers for study are compulsory for them so that they can gain knowledge about every
field
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 in order to develop them mentally and socially .
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 , in the schools children are not only taught any particular
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 but all basic
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 are available there which are essential for their personality development
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science which is present in every aspect of life , social science which tells us about geography , politics , history of the world and many more other
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 which assist students in attaining information about the world .
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 , it is important to study every
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 for young children .
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 ,
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 all the basic knowledge is essential for their growth , yet it can not be denied that offspring must give more importance to the
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 which is more liked by them . As if they will focus on that
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 particular
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 more than others ,
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 it can be helpful for them in future .
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 , if any child is interested in art and craft activities ,
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 he must be encouraged to do more activities related to creativity so that he could go professionally through
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 by which he can get satisfaction as well as will be able to earn money through his interested
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 and can
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 develop his talent in future .
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 , giving influence to an interesting
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 is
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 necessary . To conclude , I must say that after analysing the
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 discussion it is clear that even though , the favourite
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 must be given more importance than other
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 but , the attention of other
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 can not be denied .
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