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Advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world

#tourism #world
Over the
last
 decades,
tourism
 has become one of the largest industries in the world.
Majority
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The majority
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 of people have some concerns about
this
 situation. There are some benefits and drawbacks of
tourism
, and they will be discussed in
this
 essay. One of the primary advantages of
tourism
 is boosting the country’s economy, as it acts as a source of economy for both government and local people.
For instance
, when tourists arrive in a country, they tend to spend their money on a broad range of services and goods, including transportation, amusements, food, hotels, and even medical. Another advantage worth noting is that
tourism
 promotes international connections which can increase business opportunities.
In other words
,
tourism
 brings investment opportunities from wealthy foreign investors.
For example
, in many countries, government focus on
tourism
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the tourism
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 sector more in order to enhance the economy of the country
On the other hand
,
tourism
 can have an influence on local culture. In
this
 way historical buildings, monuments can be damaged by tourists.
In addition
, it can have adverse effects on the environment. Some people argue that these may gradually destroy nature
such
 as many forest areas becoming a large number of resorts and hotels, or tourists can cause pollution due to
use
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 of plastic
stuffs
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stuff
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. To conclude,
tourism
 can be advantageous in the modern world in terms of economic development and international connection.
However
, it has some disadvantages
such
 as environmental pollution and damage to
culture
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the culture
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.
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