Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many
people
think that the
government
have been
overed
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covered
offered
support
for
artists
, which
people
believe
this
money
should be spent at somewhere more important. While some
artists
has
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have
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developed lots of
artworks
to attract tourists to
increas
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increase
the economic revenue.
However
, some
artworks
are too expensive,
people
think
instead
of wasting all the
money
for
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on
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artworks
, is it better to use that fund in the hospital and age care. In
this
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essay
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assay
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essay
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I will argue that the
government
have
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tohave
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give
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given
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enomours
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enormous
support
to
artists
, meanwhile,
others
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other
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people
think it is wasting
money
on
arts
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the arts
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. If they could save some
money
for
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to
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support
the hospital and
agecare
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care
aged care
that will be much better.
Artists
have developed
lot
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a lot
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of
artworks
in many different places, painting wall is very popular in the cities, we
also
can see other different
artworks
build in the park, on the side of the street and at some famous places. These art
design
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designs
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have been
success
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successful
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to attracted
the
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apply
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traveller from anywhere, which
poeple
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people
like to visit some places with
lot
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a lot
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nice
view
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views
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for photographs.
As a result
,
people
come to a
plce
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place
not just for the nice view or
artworks
, they will spend
money
in
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hopitalies
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hospitality
,
accommadations
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accommodations
accommodation
and shopping as well.
Therefore
,
this
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these
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cities or
area
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areas
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will become famous and the
economic
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economy
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will increase
rapinly
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rapidly
, so that, the
government
can get more income tax to cover the
artists
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artist's
artists'
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funds
.
Although
,
artworks
can help the
economic
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economy
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however
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,however
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, some
people
believe it is over provided
the
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with the
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artisist
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artist
, as
hospital
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hospitals
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and
agecare
are need
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are needed
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more
funds
, while now is the pandemic time. In today covid-19 virus has been spread
to
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everywhere, in many
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hospitals
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hospital
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,hospital
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they are short of
equitments
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equipment
requirements
and Covid-19 test kit,
agecare
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age care
also
needs more antibacterial
cleannig
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cleaning
equitments
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equipment
requirements
to make sure all the elderly are living in the
save
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safe
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envirnoment
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environment
.
Therefore
, some residents believe the
governement
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government
should put more
funds
for
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into
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these 2 department
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this 2 department
these 2 departments
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instead
of wasting the
money
on arts.
Eventhought
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Even though
Even thought
the
governement
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government
have
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has
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been spent
lot
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a lot
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of
money
to
support
artists
,
however
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,however
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artworks
can increase the
economic
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economy
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,
which
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apply
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both businesses and
government
can get
the
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apply
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benefits
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benefit
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on
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from
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it.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, hospital and
agecare
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aged care
are
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care
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both needs to
be consider
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be considered
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too, as it
hopitals
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hospitals
and
agecare
are about
people
live. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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I think the
government
should put more
funds
for
hopitals
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hospitals
and
agecare
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care
in the future,
artswork
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artwork
will help the country for
keeping
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keep
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in the
finacialy
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financially
financial
stable but is less important than
people
live.
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