Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many
people
think that the government
have been overed
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covered
offered
support
for artists
, which people
believe this
money
should be spent at somewhere more important. While some artists
has
developed lots of Change the verb form
have
artworks
to attract tourists to increas
the economic revenue. Correct your spelling
increase
However
, some artworks
are too expensive, people
think instead
of wasting all the money
for
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on
artworks
, is it better to use that fund in the hospital and age care.
In this
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essay
assay
I will argue that the Correct your spelling
essay
government
have
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tohave
give
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given
enomours
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enormous
support
to artists
, meanwhile, others
Correct quantifier usage
other
people
think it is wasting money
on arts
. If they could save some Correct article usage
the arts
money
for
Change preposition
to
support
the hospital and agecare
that will be much better.
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care
aged care
Artists
have developed lot
of Change the article
a lot
artworks
in many different places, painting wall is very popular in the cities, we also
can see other different artworks
build in the park, on the side of the street and at some famous places. These art design
have been Change the determiner
designs
success
to attracted Replace the word
successful
the
traveller from anywhere, which Correct article usage
apply
poeple
like to visit some places with Correct your spelling
people
lot
nice Correct article usage
a lot
view
for photographs. Fix the agreement mistake
views
As a result
, people
come to a plce
not just for the nice view or Correct your spelling
place
artworks
, they will spend money
in
Change preposition
on
hopitalies
, Correct your spelling
hospitality
accommadations
and shopping as well. Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
Therefore
, this
cities or Correct determiner usage
these
area
will become famous and the Fix the agreement mistake
areas
economic
will increase Replace the word
economy
rapinly
, so that, the Correct your spelling
rapidly
government
can get more income tax to cover the artists
Change to a genitive case
artist's
artists'
funds
.
Although
, artworks
can help the economic
Replace the word
economy
however
, some Add the comma(s)
,however
people
believe it is over provided the
Add the preposition
with the
artisist
, as Correct your spelling
artist
hospital
and Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
agecare
are need
more Change the verb form
are needed
funds
, while now is the pandemic time. In today covid-19 virus has been spread to
everywhere, in many Change preposition
apply
Change to a plural noun
hospitals
hospital
they are short of Add a comma
,hospital
equitments
and Covid-19 test kit, Correct your spelling
equipment
requirements
agecare
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age care
also
needs more antibacterial cleannig
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cleaning
equitments
to make sure all the elderly are living in the Correct your spelling
equipment
requirements
save
Replace the word
safe
envirnoment
. Correct your spelling
environment
Therefore
, some residents believe the governement
should put more Correct your spelling
government
funds
for
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into
these 2 department
Change the determiner
this 2 department
these 2 departments
instead
of wasting the money
on arts.
Eventhought
the Correct your spelling
Even though
Even thought
governement
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government
have
been spent Change the verb form
has
lot
of Change the article
a lot
money
to support
artists
, however
Add a comma
,however
artworks
can increase the economic
, Replace the word
economy
which
both businesses and Correct pronoun usage
apply
government
can get the
Correct article usage
apply
benefits
Wrong verb form
benefit
on
it. Change preposition
from
Futhermore
, hospital and Correct your spelling
Furthermore
agecare
Correct your spelling
aged care
are
both needs to Correct your spelling
care
be consider
too, as it Change the verb form
be considered
hopitals
and Correct your spelling
hospitals
agecare
are about people
live. In my opinion
I think the Add a comma
,opinion
government
should put more funds
for hopitals
and Correct your spelling
hospitals
agecare
in the future, Correct your spelling
care
artswork
will help the country for Correct your spelling
artwork
keeping
in the Wrong verb form
keep
finacialy
stable but is less important than Correct your spelling
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financial
people
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