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Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. What is your view of examinations?

Examinations are the formal
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 of testing one's ability.
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 most
people
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 think paper-based exams are more convenient than
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computer-based
exam
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exams
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, I think each
method
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 has its flaws. I agree with the view that
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 test is not the best
way
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 to
access
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 in education. On the one hand, old
people
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 think "pen and paper" exams are the best
way
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 in the education environment.
This
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method
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 has been
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 more than
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a decades
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decades
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 and it is the easiest
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. We are using
this
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method
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 not only in the village where we could not access
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technology but
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 in schools, colleges and universities in cities.
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, knowledge is not defined by the methods we are using. It is only defined by our ability to solve
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problems.
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, because of the pandemic, computer-based exams or teaching methods are growing than face-to-face.
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people
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 need technical skills, it is easy and quick to access. In order to use
computer
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the computer
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expenses
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, expenses
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 like electricity or meter bills
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, or
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or
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and
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 internet bills are becoming expensive.
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, in the technical improving
eras
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, modern children are familiar with
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electronic devices. As mentioned above, examination accomplishment is not measuring the test system
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 it has flows too. In summary, whether we both use the old
method
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 or the new system, both systems have flaws and achievement is not based on the systems. It is only based on our skills and ability to solve problems.
People
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 choose the learning
method
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 or examination
according to
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 their preferences and perspective on the systems.

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language
Fix word use and small grammar errors so the ideas are clear.
content
Give one clear example for each idea to show your point.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas connect and to keep flow.
structure
End with a clear last sentence that restates your view.
idea
Your essay shows you think about both sides.
structure
It has an intro and a closing and uses some linking words.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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