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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dresscode. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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Some schools wear
uniforms
 and some schools
doesn’t
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 wear a
uniform
. It is depending on the
school
 which they think wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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 is important or not.
Also
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 the
school
 which thinks the
uniform
 is important
,
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 has
uniform
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a uniform
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 for Physical Education class. I think wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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 is good. Everyone wants to wear nice
clothes
 which suits
very
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them very
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 well on them,
noone
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no one
 wants to wear dirty
clothes
 and
the
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clothes
 which the pit isn’t good.
Then
 the
time
 which we choose our
clothes
 will take a lot. If your
school
 has
uniform
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, you can just take your
uniform
 and wear it. The
time
 will just take like only a few minutes and you can do other things in the remaining
time
. So wearing
uniform
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the uniform
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 can reduce your
time
.
School
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uniform
 teaches
Students
 to dress smartly. Some people
thinks
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think
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 that a
school
uniform
 can improve
the
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apply
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learning by reducing distraction, sharpening focus on
school work
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schoolwork
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 and making the classroom
like
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a serious environment, wanting the
students
 to perform better in
school
 class. The
uniform
 shows most of the student’s life or progresses in
school
.
Students
 show up to
school
 more often when they are wearing
uniforfms
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uniforms
. A study by researchers at the University of Houston found that the average attendance rate for girls in middle and high
school
 increased by 0.3 to 0.4
percent
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 after
school
uniforms
 became mandatory.A study by Youngstown State University
also
 found that attendance rates increased and suspensions decreased once
students
 began wearing
uniforms
. These were the reasons why I thought
uniforms
 are important.
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