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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dresscode. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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Some schools wear
uniforms
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 and some schools
doesn’t
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 wear a
uniform
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. It is depending on the
school
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 which they think wearing
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uniform
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a uniform
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 is important or not.
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 the
school
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 which thinks the
uniform
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 is important
,
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 has
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uniform
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a uniform
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 for Physical Education class. I think wearing
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uniform
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a uniform
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 is good. Everyone wants to wear nice
clothes
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 which suits
very
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them very
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 well on them,
noone
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no one
 wants to wear dirty
clothes
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 and
the
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clothes
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 which the pit isn’t good.
Then
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 the
time
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 which we choose our
clothes
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 will take a lot. If your
school
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 has
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uniform
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a uniform
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, you can just take your
uniform
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 and wear it. The
time
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 will just take like only a few minutes and you can do other things in the remaining
time
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. So wearing
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uniform
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the uniform
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 can reduce your
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.
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School
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A school
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uniform
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 teaches
Students
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 to dress smartly. Some people
thinks
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 that a
school
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uniform
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 can improve
the
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learning by reducing distraction, sharpening focus on
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school work
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schoolwork
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 and making the classroom
like
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a serious environment, wanting the
students
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 to perform better in
school
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 class. The
uniform
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 shows most of the student’s life or progresses in
school
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.
Students
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 show up to
school
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 more often when they are wearing
uniforfms
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uniforms
. A study by researchers at the University of Houston found that the average attendance rate for girls in middle and high
school
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 increased by 0.3 to 0.4
percent
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per cent
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 after
school
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uniforms
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 became mandatory.A study by Youngstown State University
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 found that attendance rates increased and suspensions decreased once
students
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 began wearing
uniforms
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. These were the reasons why I thought
uniforms
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 are important.

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