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Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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It is generally stated that before the birth of a child, his or her traits are already destined. In my opinion, I would like to object
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 argument as I believe that the quality of a human totally depends on the environment,
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 as where he lives or the way he has been brought up. I would like to add my viewpoints to clarify my statement.
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 with, a human character is everything. His/ her speech, politeness, kindness, etc.
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 more about his personality. It is not related to genes, it is the situations
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 create a good/bad person. I consider that only the physical appearances and hereditary diseases are passed on by the genes to the successor. His/her mental state is formed by the inspiration
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 the surroundings.
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, the family plays a vital role in the upbringing of a child's nature. As a kid, they observe everything around them and are moulded
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, children tend to eat what their parents are having for snacks or how to walk and dress.
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 is highly influential for them and later it becomes part of their style too.
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, being raised by steady parents or grandparents helps them to grow into responsible and compassionate young adults, whereas being engaged in
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aggressive and traumatic interactions with elder members of the family, kids may develop
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 traits as selfishness, opportunism, etc.
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, quality is doing the right thing even when nobody is watching. Overall, it appears that claiming that genes are responsible for one's identity. In my opinion, a person's character can be modified with proper guidance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predetermined
  • character traits
  • genetic influence
  • environmental factors
  • personality development
  • upbringing
  • foundation
  • evolution of traits
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