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the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.

A glance at the table provided reveals the number of tourists in the UK as well as their average expenditures in
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 country over the period from 2003 to 2008. Overall, the most number of travellers was 32.788
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 in 2007 while the least was related to 2003 which was 24.715
million
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 of people. One particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figures is that in 2008, 31.88
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 people visited England that spent 16.323-pound billions totally which was the most amount of costs. Of
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 amount of expenses, every visitor expended the highest proportion of their money on per visits in 2008, while the under most of their costs was related to the year 2005 which was 471. In stark contrast,
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, the lowest proportion of the whole of expenditures during these years was 11.855 in 2003 which was expended by 24.715
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 tourists who spent 8.2 nights per visit on average in
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 country.

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