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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

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The argument about providing food and education has been happening for a long time. It is believed that certain rich
nations
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 can share their resources and improve people's life residing in poorer
countries
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. I think that, if developed
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 can do business together for certain products
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 it may lead to better development for the non-developed union. In
this
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 essay, I will talk about how western
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 can help poorer
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 by making business with them,
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, how these poorer
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 governments can take care of their citizens.
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, western
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 like the USA, UK, France Germany etc. can import raw materials from under-developed
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. Some resources are abundant in these
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 and can only be found in a few areas.
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, a majority of companies in developed
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 are importing raw materials and human resources from undeveloped
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 to mitigate their cost of operations
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 as Dubai. Dubai has been recruiting labour force from Pakistan, Bangladesh etc.
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, all these activities are part of business deals and memorandum of understanding.
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, it is the primary responsibility of respective poor
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' governments to provide basic facilities like sanitation, food, and shelter. The government should work closely with non-profit organizations to help needy people.
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, in Bangladesh, the government along with charity organizations improved the drinking water infrastructure. In conclusion, inter-government organizations should bridge the gap between rich and poor
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. In my opinion, developed
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 and undeveloped
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 should work hand in hand to get the benefits.
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Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnected
  • global stability
  • economic self-sufficiency
  • sustainable development
  • capacity-building
  • foreign aid
  • mutual benefits
  • trade relations
  • long-term outcomes
  • dependency
  • moral obligation
  • alleviate poverty
  • humanitarian assistance
  • resource allocation
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