Some people think that the government should provide unemployed people with a free mobile phone and free access to the internet to help them find jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option? Give reasons for your answer and include any relative examples form your own knowledge and experience.

Now a days
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, due to the
economic
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is
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being
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in recession there are lots of graduate students
haven’t
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who haven’t
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find
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found
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their
jobs
. Some
people
hold that
government
must provide
them
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the
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mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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phones
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so that those unemployed students can use
internet
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the internet
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to find
jobs
, while others stand that there is
no
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not
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necessary to provide
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a phone
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phone
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phones
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to every unemployed
people
.
This
essay totally
disagree
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disagrees
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that
government
should give mobile
phone
to no
job
person.
Firstly
, the reason why
government
needn’t provide
phone
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phones
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is that
this
is not a solution for them to find their
jobs
. Having
phone
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a phone
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(to access the internet) is one of the factors that can help them to find
the
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a
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job
, while it is not the biggest factor why they can’t find
the
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a
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job
. In my
opinion
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the biggest question that why they can’t find the
job
is that they do not have a special skill or enough ability for them to be employed. (The skills they have are not needed or out of date.) The
first
thing
government
must open a class (training programmers) for them to learn
such
as computer
skill
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skills
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or some
others license
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other licenses
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(training courses).
Furthermore
, the way of using the internet and mobile phones is uncontrollable. We don’t know whether mobile phones will bring
benefit
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benefits
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for jobless
people
or not.
In addition
, it might have a possibility that some
people
want to have a mobile
phone
and refuse to find
the
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a
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job
.
Due to
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Government
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government
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the government
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will give every unemployed
people
(jobless
people
) a
phone
,
would
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which would
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let some
people
think that if they don’t have a
job
, they will have a free mobile
phone
.
As a result
, the motivation of finding a
job
will decline. In conclusion,
provide
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providing
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unemployed
people
with a free mobile
phone
is not a good way for
people
to find
jobs
. In
worse
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,worse
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it will be a factor that
people
dislike finding a
job
. For a good solution,
government
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the government
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should open a class (give a free and better-quality training) for unemployed students to learn more
skill
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skills
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or have some other new skills for them to have
a higher opportunities
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a higher opportunity
higher opportunities
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(more efficient a helping the unemployed ) to find a
job
.
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