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Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#students #school
In ,education some teachers will give
punishment
 if
students
 do the wrong thing or because of a bad
score
. Some people think that
students
 will have a better behave if the teacher gives
students
 rewards, while others hold that because of the
punishment
student
 have a better performance.
This
 essay discusses both sides and stands that
students
 will perform better when they are rewarded. The most significant reason why
students
 perform better if teachers give rewards is because of motivation.
Students
 will have more motivated if they know that having a good
score
 can bring them definitely.
For example
, when I was a
student
, I want to have more money to buy the thing I want. In
this
 ,situation if I know that have good behaviour in school or have a good
score
 my mother will rise my pocket money, I will study harder and be a good
student
 due to the reward.
Furthermore
, giving rewards can let
students
 feel a sense of accomplishment. Due to creating the
next
 accomplishment
student
 will try their best in school.
On the other hand
,
punishment
 might let
students
 have good behaviour due to being afraid of the
punishment
, whereas
this
 will not stay for a long time.
Students
 will never understand why they need to have a good
score
 or why they need to have a better performance. They only understand that having bad behaviour will that they to be punished.
This
 will not bring benefit in their future. In conclusion,
students
 will have a better performance in school when they are rewarded. In my opinion,
this
 will definitely bring good effect for
students
.
In addition
,
punishment
 will only bring a short time of result, for
student
’s future punish is not the best way in education.
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