Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; other say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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nation where some
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but others think that it is waste of
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way to know about the history of other nation.
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overseas where they cannot spend quality
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between them are weaker
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purchase
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where they suffer from financial issue
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think
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wastage of
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money and
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way to know about the other tradition , culture as well as languages which is very helpful for
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no doubt
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of benefits of
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the drawbacks of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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