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Media and newspaper shown vulgur crimes on news, which cause fear and provoke culprits. some people think that crime news on tv should not be broadcasted. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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broadcasting the news regarding vulgar delinquencies have been claimed to be stoped,which not only enhanced fear among individuals but
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 prompted the offenders.while some positive footprints would be experienced by prohibiting
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 news,its negative aspects cannot be ignored,
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 both notions are uttered here,I am of the releasing
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 information. one of the most highlighted benefits of warning humans of these types of offences has to do with restricting the people to get involved in these activities if their punishment is their reputation, a scandal that will co-exist with them until the
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 minute of their lives.
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,folks consciousness increase drastically about how to protect themselves against the threats that they did not use to be encountered .
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,new abuses that have taken place in the virtual world,nowadays are the most hazardous that opt its victim among all walks of life.
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,getting used to the new forms of crimes is devastating,where not only people lose their senses about them,but
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 the defaulters will
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 feel more comfortable about them,even it is feasible to become a part of the customs of the societies.
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,juveniles as the most talented groups of mankind have the potential to be absorbed to these functions,especially in the countries that they are under various tensions either financial problems or psychological shortenings. to wrap up,whereas tranquillity is bestowed to the societies by ignorance,its detrimental aspect surpass as the majority of the obstacles that individuals are encountered with is an offspring of the unawareness that they used ignore to learn if humans know about the modern routs of deceiving they will be tempted to learn the escaping ways too.
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