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Some feel that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#feel #waste #time #plan #future #focus
Many
people
 believe that you need to focus on
present
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 and not need to make plans for
future
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the future
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 at present because nobody can predict the
future
 and anything can happen in
future
. I will partially agree with
this
 thinking .ln
my
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 opinion you need to give more attention to
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the
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present as compared to
future
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the future
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 because
future
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is ascertain
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 and you cannot make
plan
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a plan
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 for
future
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the future
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 because nobody
know
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knows
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 how much
long
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longer
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 they live .
People
 need to concentrate on
present
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the present
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 and
happy
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be happy
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 with the things they have today .they need to work hard and enjoy
our
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their
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 lives with friends and family because nobody
know
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knows
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 who can live
next
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the next
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 morning .
People
 need to give more attention to
present
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the present
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 because if they can earn good
money
then
 they can purchase many things that
gives
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give
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him
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them
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 happiness which is important for everybody .
On the other
hand
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people
 make
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a plan
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plan
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plans
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 for
future
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the future
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 because they want to save
money
 for
our
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their
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 loved ones which can help
him
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them
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 in
day today
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day-today
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 expenses and they cannot lend
money
 from
unknown
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an unknown
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 person for our work .
However
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people
 need to give more importance to present .If they do
hardwork
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hard work
 today and get a good job
then
 they need not waste that
money
in
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on
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wrong
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the wrong
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 things to buy . Everybody needs to make plans for both present and
future
 that can provide benefit him.they need to make plans for
future
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the future
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 and save some part of
money
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the money
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 which can help him to overcome the problem which he faced in
future
 .
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