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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests. You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

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 letter with regards to my son's admission to Saint Joseph High school of Mumbai.
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and my family are moving to
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 city on the 2nd week of January. As I have researched and found your school to be one of the most reputed institutes in the town. I will be obliged if you can provide an opportunity for my boy to be part of
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 prestigious organization. As am a bank employee and I get transferred to a different region every 5 years,
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 time I had to work for the branch in Mumbai. As my boy is about 4 years old, he has already completed his pre-school education and will be due to join 1st standard
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 year. Your academy is a CBSE Board will benefit my son for a smooth transition from pre-school to primary. Let me share some insights about my child , he is a quick learner and quite active in his class. Teachers from his section would always praise his reading and social skills. I have enclosed a letter of reference and transfer
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 letter. Please consider my son for your school, am sure he will be a valuable asset to
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 organization. Will be waiting for your reply. Yours Faithfully, Sachin Hegde

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