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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Due to the fact that technology expands crazily in the present industry so online courses are becoming a common feature of university education. While there are admittedly several virtues to studying online, I believe that the negative influences of
this
 growing development are more glaring. The main drawback of the trend towards networked university courses is that there is a lack of direct interaction. Learning via the Internet hinders the recruitment's engagement face to face with their teachers.
This
 obstruction leads to a negative impact on peer support,discussion and exchange of ideas.
On the other hand
, students who have less
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 of learning would get inefficient results on exams.
For instance
, some learners who are not appealing to working on the Internet
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 would find another way to oppose
such
 as setting a fake screen,searching for an explanation through Google during the test period or maybe watching movies, and having a chit chat with friends at the same time as the subjects.
Besides
,online learners may
also
 lack the motivation and element of competition that online group work brings. Despite the disadvantages mentioned ,I reckon that online college courses
also
 have benefits for students.
To begin
 with, they allow learners to study in a flexible way.
For example
, undergraduates adjust their study atmospheres by going to a cafe,public library to get study inspirations. Perhaps, they can cover their learning material at their own pace.
In addition
, students can have much individual time
instead
 of transporting to universities.
Finally
, the fee of university education can be greatly reduced and mitigate the income burden for those who have unlucky circumstances. In conclusion, after considering both sides of
this
 issue, I still believe that its drawbacks outweigh the advantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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