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In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion- one the roads. What are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest?

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In recent years, job opportunities have increased to an unprecedented level, especially in the large
cities
, to which
people
 commenced to the
metropolis
 and
tostarted
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started
to started
 buy new vehicles for commuting. Because of that,
traffic
 jam is surging day by day, causing the wastage of time of
people
. The solution for
this
 is to improve the transportation
system
 in the
cities
.
Initially
,
cities
 were built from two types one is planned from zero and another is from town. Once the city is planned with thinking the future perspective it might not face the problem of
traffic
, but the large
metropolis
are
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is
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 built from the small town or village, which moves to the unplanned stage. And, because of that roads built randomly or very small without imagining of future. Another reason is, because of rising in jobs in the
cities
:
people
 started to move to the
cities
 for better opportunities and salaries. Because of that,
people
 started to buy vehicles so that they can commute in less time and in more comfort. Because of
this
traffic
 jams has raised tremendously high. To illustrate, due to the population rise in Bangalore,
people
 use to spend 10 days every year in
traffic
 and another data showed that the population in Bangalore is rising to 50 million each year. One proposal to solve
this
 issue is to make a better
transport
system
. The municipal corporations should try to make Metros or Buses
transport
system
 within the
metropolis
.
For instance
, in ,Bangalore while facing the problem of
traffic
 congestion, the local government and the municipality decided to build the
transport
system
 of buses and metro. It helped them to reduce the
traffic
 congestion by 20%. In the conclusion,
traffic
 jam is one of the biggest problems in a large
metropolis
. there are multiple reasons
such
 as increasing of population or unplanning the
cities
. But to solve
this
 we have to start making our
transport
system
 better,
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