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People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. Give reasons and solutions

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Today's population consume a plethora of ready-made foods rather than natural healthy. They like to
drink
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 more soft
drinks
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due to
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because
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this
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they
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have
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having
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 more flavours and taste. Drinking coconut
water
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 and eight bottles of tap
water
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 is the best
remedies
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 for
this
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 problem.
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,
this
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 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are many soft
drinks
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are
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that are
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 quite popular
to
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apply
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around the world.
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, people
drink
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 soft
drinks
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 after eating heavy foods like Coke, Pepsi and
Redful
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Red
; these kinds of sugary
drinks
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 can cure
diegestion
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digestion
digestive
 problem immediately not only cures digestion but
also
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 gives more
energy
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 to the consumers. Many youngsters like to
drink
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 always sugary
drinks
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 in everyday-based
such
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 as
party
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parties
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 and
celebartion
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celebration
. These are the main reasons for
fokls
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folks
 are drinking
ore
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more
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 and more
drinks
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 due to taste and
energy
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-based. There are some possible solutions to reduce
this
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 problem.
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, coconut
water
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 and tap
water
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 provides
same
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the same
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 level of
energy
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, nutrition and minerals.
Dietitions
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Dietitians
 and nutritions suggest a regular diet plan to follow folks;
everyday
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every day
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 should
drink
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 eight bottles of tap
water
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 in order
to
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so
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they
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apply
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can get the same amount of
energy
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 and protein.
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, there are so many natural healthy
drinks
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 items are available
in
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at
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very
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a very
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 low
price
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prices
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. To conclude, today's population can get easily ready-made foods from all shops. Giving more
energy
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 and taste is the
reasons
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reason
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 for folks drinking a lot of soft
drinks
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; drinking coconut
water
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 and eight bottles of tap
water
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 can give more protein and minerals to all
populatiion
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population
populations
.
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