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Governments should invest more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than building new roads. (To what extent) do you agree or disagree?

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Governments should invest more in public
transport
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 as buses and trains rather than building new
roads
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 discuss both sides and give your opinion. There are some
people
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 that the governments should spend much money
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 increasing the number of public
transport
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, while others argue that making new
roads
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 is way more important than that. From what I see, finding more
roads
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 is not as important as giving citizens much comfort by offering more buses or subways than before.
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 argument is based on the fact that amending something is better than making something new. Those who believe that it is important to make new
roads
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 strongly underline the importance of efficiency. Some
people
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 who got tired of commuting for over an hour would like to lessen the time that it takes to get to their workplace. It means that
people
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 who are sick of spending a lot of time
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 to work would give much more importance to
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 the amount of the time.
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, others may argue that making
remaining
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 public
transport
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 system better is the best way that can make the public content.
People
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 who
doesn’t
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 have their own cars take buses
,
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 and get on subways, which will get them to many other places that they want to go. Most of the
people
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 in
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 country would’ve used
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public
transport
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 more than once.
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