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Governments should invest more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than building new roads. (To what extent) do you agree or disagree?

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Governments should invest more in public
transport
such
 as buses and trains rather than building new
roads
 discuss both sides and give your opinion. There are some
people
 that the governments should spend much money
in
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 increasing the number of public
transport
, while others argue that making new
roads
 is way more important than that. From what I see, finding more
roads
 is not as important as giving citizens much comfort by offering more buses or subways than before.
This
 argument is based on the fact that amending something is better than making something new. Those who believe that it is important to make new
roads
 strongly underline the importance of efficiency. Some
people
 who got tired of commuting for over an hour would like to lessen the time that it takes to get to their workplace. It means that
people
 who are sick of spending a lot of time
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 to work would give much more importance to
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 the amount of the time.
However
, others may argue that making
remaining
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 public
transport
 system better is the best way that can make the public content.
People
 who
doesn’t
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 have their own cars take buses
,
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 and get on subways, which will get them to many other places that they want to go. Most of the
people
 in
this
 country would’ve used
the
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public
transport
 more than once.
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