In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

In some countries,

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growth of

economy

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the economy

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should be considered as the

first

priority for the

policy makers

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. The main benefits of

this

are

lower

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unemployment rate and the development of international trade.

However

, the key drawbacks are

unfriendly

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environment and

unhealthy

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an unhealthy

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lifestyle.  It cannot be denied that to enhance the financial situation, governments need to provide more career opportunities for everyone in order to lessen the number of unemployed. They have to prevent their population from being jobless because

this

is a major obstacle

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the development of

national

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the national

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economy. If

people

have suitable jobs, they will have enough money to increase spending on things they desire which is one of the effective approaches to stimulate economic growth.

Moreover

,

this

policy

improve

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sales's

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productivity

especially

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,especially

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export products.

State

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makes

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apply

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better progress in trading by reducing

tax

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taxes

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for

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and

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encouraging

people

to run more businesses.

For example

,

last

year when the Thai government decided to broaden their international trade, there was a

significant

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increasing

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rate in exported products.

Nevertheless

, when the state's priority is

economy

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the economy

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, their

policy

is not

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about the effects on the environment. The development of industrial factories brings more pollution to the community. A huge amount of carbon dioxide emitted from the manufacturing plants not only destroy the earth's atmosphere but

also

increase temperature.

In addition

,

people

tend to face more health problems because they have to work overtime for making more money in order to support their government's

policy

. They have less time for exercise or relaxation.

For instance

, in Bangkok even though

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average amount of income is higher,

people

are suffering from being stressed. In conclusion, putting economic growth as the

first

priority not only decrease the number of unemployed but

also

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the national trade.

Nonetheless

,

this

endangers the environment and destroy

people

's

work life

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balance.