The differences between countries are becoming less and less evident, as people all over the world wear the same fashions, use the same brands, have similar eating habits and watch the same TV channels. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

Due to globalization all
people
across the globe are using the same products and following
same
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fashion according to
latest
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trend
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. In
past
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people
have their own traditional dress and use products which are manufactured in their own
country
.But due to
liberalisation
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of government policies in trade if the product is made
any where
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we can purchase the item while living in
other
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another country
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country
easily. Even most
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foreign
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the foreign
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countries are shipping online as
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a customer
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customer
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customers
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can order it from any
country
just by giving
his
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address.
People
eating habits
also
changed in recent times due to
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number of restaurants emerging in all countries. when
i
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am young we
cant
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find any burgers or noodles in our city.But from past ten
years
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many international brands entered the market and made their
country
food available to
people
living in
anouther
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another
country
.Even
peoplecan
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people can
watch all channels all over the
world
through dish connection.Many clothing brands are available all over the
world
In my ,opinion advantages outweigh disadvantages.As the
world
is well integrated through
internet
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the internet
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we can watch movies through Netflix by sitting anywhere in the
world
.Fashion
now a days
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is not restricted within a
country
boundary.
On the other
hand
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every
country
have
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their own customs and traditions. But due to
globalisation
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many
people
are forgetting their own customs.Films are internationally released
people
are driving their attention to
such
foreign films.More
people
are knowledgeable about
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the foreign
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way
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of living than they are about their own culture. To conclude, As all the countries are well integrated these days merits outweigh drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global community
  • interconnectedness
  • cultural exchange
  • global brands
  • economic benefits
  • shared prosperity
  • cultural identity
  • cultural diversity
  • environmental impact
  • local customs
  • local businesses
  • economic difficulties
  • adaptation
  • culture shock
  • dominance
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