The cultures of many countries around the world become more similar than they used to be. What are the reasons for this trend? Is it positive or negative?

Traditions of many nations all over the
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became
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similar than they used to be in the past. I think
this
is
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because
of travelling, exploring different places and
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internet
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. I believe
that is
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a positive
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trend which
make
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people
more comfortable.
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would
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discuss the
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positive
and negative aspects of
this
essay.
Firstly
,
cultures
around the world
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becoming similar because recently
people
started migrating to different
countries
for
thier
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their
studies and jobs. After staying for
long
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they start following
culture
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the culture
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of
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a specfic
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specfic
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specific
country.
For instance
,
people
from many
countries
started to migrate
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to canada
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canada
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Canada
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which is
multi-cultural
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a multi-cultural
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country. Habitants of various nations
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there and
celebrates
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their festival which leads others
also
to celebrate happiness.
Secondly
, historical memories books and videos of
cultures
inspire
public
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the public
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to follow
specfic
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specific
traditions,
Lastly
, some
people
like the clothes and foods of
specfic
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specific
country which make them follow that
cultures
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culture
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which leads
it
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to positive trends.
On the other hand
, It might cause
few
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effects as well. Following other
countries
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countries'
country's
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traditions sometimes leads to
dissatiftion
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dissatisfaction
dissociation
to own
regilion
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religion
religions
and
cultures
.
For example
, most
of
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the
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indian
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Indian
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are
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pure
vegartians
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vegetarians
and after coming to other
countries
start eating non-
vegartians
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vegetarians
which harms their religious beliefs.
Moreover
,
people
start learning new
cultures
and forget their
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beliefs and roots from where they
orginally
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originally
came from which hurts the
feeling
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feelings
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of their
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ones. To
be conclude
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, Following other
cultures
make
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makes
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people
learn many new things which helps them to settle on different parts of the world but it
also
leads them
negivative
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negative
effects.
According to
me, It helps in
postive
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positive
growth which makes
people
more confident in expressing themselves in front
various
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of various
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culture
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people
.
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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Homogenous
  • Cultural convergence
  • Multinational corporations
  • Cultural diversity
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Cultural richness
  • Cultural identities
  • Preserving
  • Erosion
  • Dominance
  • Technological advancements
  • Consumer culture
  • International understanding
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