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With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?,

#world #population #people #gm #foods #offer
In the past two
decades
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 one of the major
issue
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 that humanity is facing is the inability to produce enough
food
 for the growing world population.
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Therefor
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 many are suggesting that to solve
this
problem
 genetically modified
food
 should be introduced. In
this
essay
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 I will be discussing why I believe that
this
 approach could help in
food
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 shortage
problem
 that the world
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in
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 facing but it will not solve it.
To begin
 with, the cardinal reason why I disagree with
this
 notion is the fact that genetically modified
food
pose
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serious
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 health issue to human and the environment. Studies have
showed
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 that
the
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food
-related issues have increased in the past 10 years within children from age 3 to 7 due to the popularity of genetically engineered
food
.
Moreover
, genetically modified crops are believed to be dangerous and deadly to them which affect the balance of our ecosystem.
Furthermore
, it
cause
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 unwanted residual effects and can remain in the soil for
extended
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 period of time which may cause damage to the agriculture sector. Another major issue that comes with genetically engineered
food
 is that the production of
this
 kind of
food
 will be dominated by
few
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 powerful biotechnology companies.
However
. We cannot ignore the benefit that genetically
modify
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food
 has brought to us, most importantly is the fact we are able to produce more
food
,
therefore
,
this
 has helped alleviate the hunger
problem
 that the world is facing,
in addition
 to that crops are more resistant to disease and
less
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 pesticides are used and
last
 but
no
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 least the
food
 can be given a better
flavor
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 and texture. To sum up,
although
 genetically
modify
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food
 may help to reduce the
problem
 of hunger by producing more
product
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 in a cheap fast way.
This
 trend may lead to
major
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consequence
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 that will affect our health and environment.
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