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With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?,

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In the past two
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 one of the major
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 that humanity is facing is the inability to produce enough
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 for the growing world population.
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 many are suggesting that to solve
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problem
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 genetically modified
food
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 should be introduced. In
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 I will be discussing why I believe that
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 approach could help in
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food
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 shortage
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 that the world
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in
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 facing but it will not solve it.
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 with, the cardinal reason why I disagree with
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 notion is the fact that genetically modified
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serious
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 health issue to human and the environment. Studies have
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 that
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food
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-related issues have increased in the past 10 years within children from age 3 to 7 due to the popularity of genetically engineered
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.
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, genetically modified crops are believed to be dangerous and deadly to them which affect the balance of our ecosystem.
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 unwanted residual effects and can remain in the soil for
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 period of time which may cause damage to the agriculture sector. Another major issue that comes with genetically engineered
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 is that the production of
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 kind of
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 will be dominated by
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 powerful biotechnology companies.
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. We cannot ignore the benefit that genetically
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food
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 has brought to us, most importantly is the fact we are able to produce more
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,
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,
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 has helped alleviate the hunger
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 that the world is facing,
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 to that crops are more resistant to disease and
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 pesticides are used and
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no
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 least the
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 can be given a better
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 and texture. To sum up,
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 genetically
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food
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 may help to reduce the
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 of hunger by producing more
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 in a cheap fast way.
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 trend may lead to
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consequence
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 that will affect our health and environment.
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