people believe that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjects that will be useful for their future career. Other people say that subjects such as music and sports are also necessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals believe that it is better teachers just consider learning academic fields in the
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based on the other's views, it is obligatory that sports and music become the inseparable part of schools program. In
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essay, I will analyse both mentioned views and state in my belief, it should be necessary to consider academic , sport and art skills in schools scheduled programs. On one hand, focusing on the academic courses is obligatory for
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because they learn them just through schools and we know promotion in technology, medicine and industry depends strictly on a strong teaching basic courses like math, physics, chemistry and stuff like that.
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, in the USA, the government concentrated on computer science from primary school to university and we witness the invention of new applications like Instagram, Twitter and
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mathematical simulation. In fact, they nurture some great scientists
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as Jane Alex, Robert Alis and David Sou who are permanently searching for new aspects of computer sciences. It should be mentioned, the USA academic degree has reached from 2 to 1 and get a lot of yst profits from it which use them to boom the USA economy.
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, each country must consider sports and art programs like football, tennis, singing and things like that to be able to recognise and
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nurture the
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' talents. We know
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needs national champions to be a famous country
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worldwide and be able to gain a lot of money via them and spend it for social promotion.
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, Real Madrid as a football team has gained a lot of achievements and has imported lots of money for the Spain government. By the way of conclusion, from some
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point of view, learning just academic fields is enough whereas others believe that sports and music are so important for
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. I would contend that just paying attention to academic courses cannot reach
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to the best level and it is better shools have some specific programs to grow sport and art skills in order to
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gain the highest level of promotion in technology and industry.
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