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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eat meat can cause serious health problems . Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
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Eating a healthy diet is more important for health.
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, it is sometimes thought vegetarian meal is good for healthy life because non-vegetarian
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 leads to serious health problems. In my opinion, I considered that vegetables and fruits have lots of minerals and it provides immense benefits to our body. There are several reasons to adopt vegan
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. The
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 and foremost important thing is that it is the source of vitamins and proteins.
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, fruits
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 as bananas, dates, berry and so on and all give proteins to our body.
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, vegetable
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 as spinach, Bringle has a lot of irons.
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, vegetarian
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 plays a crucial role in our life to keep healthy. Another reason to consider why
people
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 should avoid
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 means vegetarian
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 helps to keep weight in control.
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, one survey has conducted in the UK,
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 who adopt vegetarian
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 are more fitter and their immune system is very strong rather than those
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 who have chicken and
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.
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, doctors
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 advise adding more fruits and vegetables to live a healthy life.
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, sometimes eating
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 is
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 necessary and all
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 do not have to face difficulties getting by all meats.
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,
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 who live in very cold areas and they need to eat chicken and all to protect their body from fridge weather.
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, non-vegetarian
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 like fish is not may cause health issues. In conclusion, it is true that a vegetarian diet has more advantages as compared to
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, but the importance of non-vegetarian
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 should not neglect.
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