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In some countries people of all groups are engaging into many sports or over-exercising. Are there more advantages or drawbacks to this development.

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A growing number of
people
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 in some countries place a premium on exercising more than expected.
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 playing sport has many benefits, the drawbacks involved are of importance to be discussed. on the plus side, it may appear that engaging in over-exercising proves beneficial. The
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 axiomatic reason is concerned with the improvement of mental and physical well-being. Simply put,
people
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 these days are under fire by hectic schedules so they need a healthy hobby to relieve the distress,
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 as strain in anxiety.
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 in turn paves the way for them to forget about their deadlines and concentrate better. Take a designer with a contract for two months as a salient example; by ,workout he is more likely to block out all the stress and tension and concentrate on the job to approach his deadline. Peoples confidence,
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, could be enhanced as they become fit. peoples confidence,
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, could be enhanced as they become fit, thereby boosting both physical and mental health. having said that,
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, the downside of over-training should not be underestimated.
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people
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 work out vigorously for a long time they are bound to dehydrate. As a direct result, the loss of water impact their body and not only impair their health but
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 hinder their concentration.
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, dehydration makes them weak and it is not a sound habit. A good illustration of
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 is that dehydration causes a strain on their heart, thereby compensating their
heartbeats
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 faster and causing them to feel palpitations. Another evident disadvantageous side is muscle loss.
People
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 should measure the number of fats and muscles they have and
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 obviate their body needs. to sum up, the tendency of playing too many sports or over-training would be both rewarding and problematic. While it may help
people
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 to guarantee their concentration in shape, in my opinion,
people
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 are highly likely to suffer from harassment.

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