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The maps illustrate the change of a city named Islip before and after its reconstruction. Overall, lots of new facilities will be built along with the modification of a city plan, including bus station, shopping centre, carpark, and road infrastructure. According to the information, Islip currently has empty areas and buildings spreading all over the town without a good organization. The countryside is located at the far north of the map, while shops are placed along two sides of the main road. There are two housing areas, one is
next
 to the shopping zone, and one is settled between a park and school.
In addition
, all roads are still not well-connected. Looking into the plan after its development, a dual carriageway circulates around the town, with a pedestrian walkway linking the east and west.
Also
, one side of the stores will be renovated into a bus station, a shopping centre, a carpark, and a new housing area, with a road linking to the entrance.
Additionally
, a new housing zone will as well be constructed at the inner part of a town, beside a small park, while its original school and housing area are left at the outer part.
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